I meet Jake Pual

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I meet my favourite You Tuber!

Ahh what a beautiful day, wait Oh my god is that who I think it is, it’s JAKE PAUL! the fastest growing youtuber, and he’s taking a photo by the train, should I photobomb do you think he will notice me, let’s go for it. 📷 He turns around instantly with a confused look in his eye and he asks me some questions like what are you doing here and why did you photobomb, not the best look when you meet your favourite youtuber. He left  soon after and I never saw him again. As soon as he was out of sight I screamed not just because I meet my favorite youtuber also because I might be famous.

I am trying to make my writing more exciting for the reader by varying my sentence beginnings and using descriptive language

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Use a variety of sentence beginnings

Use punctuation

Add adjectives and verbs

Use a variety of sentence lengths   Success criteria

Bad hair day (100 word story)

Bad hair day

“Time to get up”, my mum screamed from downstairs.

“Make sure you look nice for photo day”

wait it’s photo day oh no! With a rush I get to the bathroom and and ran to the mirror I have never seen my Beautiful brown hair so messy before. I’m not ready for someone to hold a camera in my in front of this mess. I look back to yesterday from when I was putting the my new shampoo in my hair after, I put my hair curling cream in my hair. Worried I grab my shampoo and read the fine print it said don’t mix with other products!

I am trying to make my writing more exciting for the reader by varying my sentence beginnings and using descriptive language